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一楼献给香克斯~


1楼2011-03-30 08:17回复
    二楼献给罗.


    2楼2011-03-30 08:18
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      3楼2011-03-30 21:25
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        我看了小feng写的正文初稿一二章,很不错的说~~
        小feng有没有一个大致情节的构思?~~


        4楼2011-03-30 21:37
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          恩恩,有的,没有写下来,不过大概情节在脑子里
          我在这里剧透好了~
          那两章我想排序放到后面去,因为是讲女主和香克斯的历史的...开篇如果模仿OP是冒险型的,会更容易抓住视线吧~
          


          IP属地:英国5楼2011-03-31 02:51
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            好吧,这是以前的设想,几乎不能用了吧...下次发新的设想,不会是英文的了...
            Part I
            This part is about Shanks, Richard and Sarah’s childhood in the West Blue. The story mainly took part in a small village by the sea called the Rice.
            Plot 1
            Richard, Shanks and Sarah are from the same village in West Blue.
            Shanks set off to be a pirate before us.
            According to the manga Shanks wanted to find One Piece too when he was young.
            The first chapter of the manga told us this.
            I would like Sarah to be the one who made his straw hat~ =^_^= Good or bad idea? [Bad! Oda went ahead before you! He’s done it again! That straw hat is from Roger!]
            Shanks was not as nice as he is now and he might had a bad temper and is cocky because of his sword skill.
            We are very tight back then but and Sarah taught him many things about how to be gentle with people and finally like him more than a friend.
            Richard always persuaded her not to do anything stupid.
            Former plan:
            Kids in the village play the game ‘the Pirate King’.
            Shanks’ group was strong but those boys don’t know how to cooperate and he himself didn’t realise the responsibilities a captain has. (Which can be the reason why Shanks can bring together a great group of pirates later.)
            He won the game but I didn’t approve that he was ‘the Pirate King’ simply because in the end he is alone.
            I challenged him another round and no one won.
            I fetched the hat and ran to the seaside because I couldn't accept this result.
            ‘I will give this to you when you’re really capable of being a pirate captain.’
            Somehow he learnt to be better.
            We became good friends or maybe more than just friends.
            When he was about 15, Gol D. Roger came to our village.
            ‘What do you think a pirate is?’
            ‘Being yourself, be free and live the life you want.’
            ‘Come with me. It’ll be really fun.’
            ‘I’m not going with you, Shanks.’
            ‘Why not? This is a chance for practice.’
            ‘I’m not ready yet but you are. We’ll meet again on the sea someday.’
            ‘You’ll be a captain then.’
            ‘En~ and so will you.’
            Silence kept on filling the distance between our hearts. Something we know that it is there but we pretended that it was just a stone in the way.
            ‘We are all after the One Piece.’
            ‘En.’
            ‘Will we be enemy then when we meet?’
            ‘You just can’t prevent it happening, can you? We are pirates, got to live the life you lead.’ she turned to him and smiled. ‘No worries, do what you can to stop me. I will be much stronger then.’
            ‘Who’s worrying about that~’
            ‘~’
            Plot 2...
            


            IP属地:英国6楼2011-03-31 07:36
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              恩,就是这样吧...
              因为萨拉其实是东海出生的,名字里有个D。
              她小时候跟随父母来到西海安家,从来没有回东海过。
              由于家庭的期望与社会对东海人的歧视,她从小有些心理压力。
              一直到巴基跟他爸出现在西海,恩,以上动乱是他们很讨人厌的商人贩子搞出来的,给东海人丢了很多脸,萨拉气不打一处来,于是...
              


              IP属地:英国8楼2011-03-31 07:47
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                哟~小feng ~我来了


                9楼2011-03-31 07:51
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                  这个动乱情节之后是比较缓和的一章
                  巴基留下来,原因什么还没想好...= =
                  总之他们几个整天吵吵囔囔的很happy~
                  直到有一天,罗杰来啦~
                  雷利在岛上闲逛的时候正好遇见香克斯他们练习霸气,he's very impressed,于是想招香克斯上船,可以进一步教他使用霸气+剑术。
                  香克斯很想去,萨拉不想让他去,于是小两口吵架...[喂喂!
                  于是出发那天香克斯赌气没有告别就上船了
                  其实萨拉是激将法让他离开,并给他留了信条。
                  恩恩,对了,巴基也一起上船了
                  


                  IP属地:英国10楼2011-03-31 07:54
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                    蓝酱早上好~!0.0 来得好呢~


                    IP属地:英国11楼2011-03-31 07:55
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                      我们遇在一起很不容易呐,你那边好晚了吧
                      剧透什么的,不要紧,到时候讨论好了,把楼删掉就行~
                      也就是说从香克斯遇到罗杰之前讲起哦,嗯,是挺吸引人的
                      小feng 想让我怎么做呢?


                      12楼2011-03-31 07:56
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                        一起想一些能产生羁绊的线索吧~蓝会写推理文的话,一定没问题~


                        IP属地:英国13楼2011-03-31 07:59
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                          啊…那个英文版的……大概能看懂…
                          我最烂的就是英语了…4、6级怎么办都不知道…
                          =3=,让我好好研究一下


                          14楼2011-03-31 07:59
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                            恩,我能再讲一下另外几个部分吗~?0w0
                            上面还只是西海篇~=w=


                            IP属地:英国15楼2011-03-31 08:01
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                              英文版的大部分都没用了...OJZ 因为尾田老师抢先一步...


                              IP属地:英国16楼2011-03-31 08:02
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