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【英文诗歌】处女作You Are Not Alone

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you are not alone
I'll be your friend
like a bird runs after the wind
and the sunshine falls into your palms
look at my eyes and feel my heart
they‘ll be warm to you day and night
no matter how long the time has gone
pretty girl,
smell the flowers and grass
find the color belong to your soul
don't afraid the dirty road to the garden
you are so pure that none is able to hurt
when the brook flows into the lake
taking the bluestone's missing and grudging
when the sunset glow makes the sky more beautiful
leaning your shadow on the white lotus
you will feel the soft side of the nature
like an angle kissing your eyes
listen to the song from leaves’ flapping
you may doult who writes this wonderful melody
the flying birds have taken its answer
don't be sad,don't cry
the truth is always in your hands
green world,simple life
you can touch the happyness‘ embrace so easily
and find the God’s smile for you
don‘t be nervous,don’t be shy
relax yourself and move your feet
you will hear one voice in mind
“you are not alone,sweety girl”
forget the hard time from your memory
like a flower petal flies into the earth
without complaining and pain
after next year
your fragrance will still be full of the spring
its beauty is forever
like I am waiting for you forever and ever


1楼2013-09-03 10:43回复
    欢迎新人……以及似乎看见了一些语法错误,有些纯属中文式造句。
    比如应该是
    be afraid of sth/doing sth
    期待更多完善的作品,加油。


    2楼2013-09-03 20:08
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      我觉得写的很美


      来自Android客户端3楼2014-03-16 10:42
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        It is a good work considering it is your debut in poetry writing.
        You may wish to pay a little more attention to cadence or rhythm next time, if I may suggest. Of course, grammar is always something you can never be careful enough.


        4楼2014-03-16 16:03
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          the name attracts me


          来自Android客户端5楼2014-03-19 23:43
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            莫愁前路无知己,天下谁人不识君?


            6楼2014-04-17 19:44
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              楼主借鉴一下啦不算侵犯版权吧就最后一段.....或者和开头.....


              7楼2014-05-21 20:04
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                赞(≥▽≤)


                IP属地:辽宁来自Android客户端10楼2014-12-22 00:03
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                  太赞了!!


                  来自Android客户端11楼2015-01-13 19:28
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                    赞!


                    IP属地:广东12楼2015-11-29 14:23
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                      楼主可以用你的诗歌吗,想拿来朗诵


                      来自Android客户端13楼2016-10-14 20:22
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                        IP属地:广东来自Android客户端14楼2016-10-30 13:59
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                          有点中国式英语 还有单词拼写错误哦~要好好改一下了 不介意的话可以找我帮你哦~


                          来自iPhone客户端15楼2016-12-07 07:56
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                            搜索什么跳出来这首诗。写得很美,很美。评论这毛病那毛病的人,写不出来的。说你中式英语的都是中国人。英语国的人不会这么说。语序不是学校老师教的那样一成不变的。


                            IP属地:广东16楼2024-05-23 19:27
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