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【勉】邓肯历险记——信

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一封给未来的自己的信= -=......


IP属地:新加坡1楼2014-09-06 07:50回复
    The Letter
    “Dear me,
    How are you doing? Ten years has passed by just like a flash. I bet you must have become ahandsome boy now……”
    Duncan found the wrinkled yellow letter when he was doing some big cleaning in his bedroom. He could not see the words on the letter clearly, but at least he remembers that who wrote it……
    Memories about the past just appear in his mind. There was a boy with a mother, talking,playing and dreaming about what they could be in the future.
    “Mom, the time is going so slow, I’ll never grow up with such a slow speed of time!” The naughty boy was just complaining why he could not grow up in one day. He just wanted to have a job and live like his mother.
    “Oh dear, you are wrong. The time is going so fast that we cannot control or stop it at all.You will not be that happy as you imagine now when you become at my age.Cherish your time or you will regret!” The mother just smiled and talked patiently to her son. The boy did not even notice his mother’s rough hands anda few snowy hairs on her head.
    “I just don’t believe it……” The boy talked in whispers. And then he looked at the blue sky with some birds flying past the window.
    “Honey, you may write a letter to ‘yourself after ten years’ to ask how ‘you’ feel about the time!” This idea came out of the mother’s mind and she gave her son the idea.
    “Um……Well, it sounds cool. I’ll do it right now!” The boy jumped and ran to write the letter to himself in the future. And the mother stood at the door, watching her sonwith a smile, but praying the time could stop even just for a sec, so she could hold her son in her arms for some more time. But the boy, he was so young andhe did not know his mother’s thoughts at all, and he kept writing……
    That boy was him, Duncan,and the sword of the ten-year time hurt his mother so much and left so many emotional scars. He was reading the letter with plenty of tears in his eyes. He was just sitting in the chair as he did ten years ago. Then Duncan finally realized how fast the time had passed away, he did not have any ideas what to do, but just wanted to go into his mother’s arms. Just then, he found his mother standing at the door, just like ten years ago. She was still smiling, but with tears. Duncan rushed to her……
    “Please write back to me soon and tell me how you feel about the time……”
    The letter said so at the end, how he wished to write back to the childish boy but time just made it impossible for him ……


    IP属地:新加坡2楼2014-09-06 07:50
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      “亲爱的我啊,
      你最近过得还好吗?十年或许转瞬即逝,我敢说你现在一定是一个大帅哥……“
      邓肯在卧室里面大扫除的时候发现了这封褶皱的已经发黄的信。他看不太清信上面的字了,但至少他还记得是谁写了这封信……
      记忆如潮水一般在他的脑中汹涌。一幅画面慢慢浮现,那个男孩和他的母亲又说又笑,幻想着未来的一切。
      “妈啊,时间忒慢点了,过得这么慢我肯定长不大啦!”这个淘气的男孩正抱怨着他为什么不能快快长大。他只是想找份工作,过得像他妈妈那样的大人罢了。
      “哦宝贝,你错了。时间过得很快的,如脱缰的野马。当你真到了我这个年龄时,你不会像你现在想象的那么开心的。珍惜时间吧,将来后悔可来不及咯!”妈妈微笑着耐心地向儿子解释。那个孩子根本没注意到他母亲那粗糙的双手和两鬓泛起的白雪。
      “我可不信……”男孩低声自语。然后他就扭过头去看窗外蓝天上飞过的小鸟。
      “亲爱的,你可以给‘十年后的自己’写封信问问‘你’觉得时间到底快还是慢!”妈妈脑海中突然蹦出了这个主意,然后她就告诉了儿子。
      “呃……好吧,听起来还不错。我现在就去!”男孩蹦蹦跳跳地去给未来的自己写信。他的妈妈就站在门口,微笑着看着自己的孩子,内心却祈求时光慢些吧,让她能多些陪伴她的儿子。但那个男孩,他太小了根本不了解母亲内心的想法,他还在那奋笔疾书……
      那个男孩就是邓肯,十年的岁月摧残了他的母亲,留下太多爱的伤疤。邓肯读着读着,眼中噙满了泪水。他就像十年前那样坐在椅子上。那时,邓肯终于明白了时间流逝得有多快但他手足无措,他现在只想扑进妈妈温暖的怀抱中。刚好,邓肯发现他的母亲正如十年前那样,微笑着站在门口,不过,亦是泪眼朦胧。邓肯扑进了母亲的怀抱……
      “请尽快会信,告诉我你认为时间到底是什么样的……”
      那封信以此结尾,邓肯多么希望真的能回信给那个幼稚的男孩啊,但时光却那么残忍……


      IP属地:新加坡3楼2014-09-06 07:50
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        嗯,这个没记错的话是考试时候写的= =比较匆忙,语言比较粗糙,内容16/20分+语言6/10分=总分22/30分。这篇文章比较值得借鉴的一个地方呢,就是框架结构了。大家可以用书信以及回忆这种形式的文字来吸引读者阅读兴趣哦= -=~~~~~


        IP属地:新加坡4楼2014-09-06 07:51
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          怎么现在@人@多了还得要验证码呢,度娘什么时候出的这个设计= =


          IP属地:新加坡6楼2014-09-06 07:53
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            刚刚起床


            来自Android客户端7楼2014-09-06 08:01
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              挽尊


              IP属地:广东来自Android客户端8楼2014-09-06 08:10
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                挽!


                IP属地:广东来自Android客户端9楼2014-09-06 08:28
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                  这个英语作文是你写的么?写成这样算是砖家水平了,不错!


                  IP属地:江苏来自iPhone客户端10楼2014-09-06 09:07
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                    用词都是比较平淡的,但是给人感觉语句非常漂亮


                    IP属地:江苏来自iPhone客户端11楼2014-09-06 09:08
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                      这个文章我不看中文基本能够读懂意思【看来英语没白学】但是我写不出这样的文章,点赞!


                      IP属地:江苏来自iPhone客户端12楼2014-09-06 09:13
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                        来自Android客户端13楼2014-09-06 09:30
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                          英语。。


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                          IP属地:云南来自Android客户端14楼2014-09-06 23:43
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