这是老师批改后的。
您的作文:Ratchet and Clank is a video game on the
///Play station/// 4. You must ///discover///
some new area to get the new energy and kinds of equipment. If you become powerful enough, you can defeat the bosses in the different planets. You are allowed to use the weapons in the special places. But you are not allowed to access to the secret area if you don't achieve some rare tools. Your final goal is to fight with DR. Drek, a devil who want to destroy many planets.

有翻译吗

discovery 当动词用

Only on play station 改

全是简单句

当年上大学，英语有个课前演讲，讲了一下魔兽还做了个PPT，结尾时还放了一下英文版的宣传CG

感觉还有好多错误和不地道的地方。。老师也是懒。access不作动词用，最后从句那里应该是wants

看的我尴尬症都犯了